This week in writing we have been learning about how to write a persuasive argument.
I found it challenging trying to find the right words for my audience.
Persuading my Mum to let me dye my hair.
Did you know mum that I wanted to dye my hair? I´ve wanted to for a long time, it's, just the ends Mum and i will do it ones.
First Mum I disgustedly sorta don't like the colour brown because it makes me look like Teagen.
Second so I look nicer with colour Mum and, so I sort of look like you.
Third I want to be like you Mum, with pink and purple hair color, so I look different to over people.
I believe that I should have my hair dye and I will not annoy-you anymore.
By Carla
Interesting persuasion Carla. I like how you are trying to make Mum feel good that you want to look like her.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mr M for the comment. I tried my best to fit the right words brcause strong words work better. I like the feedback you have given me and I will try to improve my writing. I will do more persuading like this Mr M.
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