The Mysterious object
As we sit there, watching, we see the great king of literacy attempt to make a simple, round object made of the following; Poisonous, disgustable raisins; bitter, dark cocoa; bland, tasteless coconut and oats. We stare, involuntarily, as the imperator starts to amalgamate all the ingredients together using a food processor and the reverberation coming was execrable. The concoction was starting to come together. 
As we slowly started to receive the horrible looking mixture, we rolled the conglomeration into a small spherical shape. After that, we all waited for the other people to finish rolling their interfusion into a ball-like figure. The object looked so incredibly inedible, that it already looked like I didn't want to eat it. After that, we rolled the globules in either utterly, bitter cocoa powder or grated, bland pieces of coconut. 
After that, we talked about how it felt like, looks like, smells like and tastes like. We thought of different words to describe the truffle. After that, we ate the globules. It was the moment that I was dreading. Then, I ate a small bite. It was abhorrent at first, but then I had a bit more and I discovered that it was actually not all that bad.
For the last part, we had to make a piece of writing about the mystery balls that we made and ate which is what you are reading now.
by Jed
WALT write about an experience using descriptive language features.
hello my name is jacob from yms school and it seems to be yum
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DeleteI like the Interesting words that you used. This remind me of coconut biscuits. Keip up the good work
DeleteKia ora Jed,
ReplyDeleteWhat AMAZING writing! You had me hooked right in the very first sentence as I wondered what you were going to be writing about... the only clue being the picture. I am wondering who the great king of literacy is??? You have used some amazing words in your writing - I love - reverberation, conglomeration and abhorrent. Where did you find these words? I am glad you liked your mystery ball in the end. I eat bliss balls for my morning tea most days. I LOVE them!
Tania
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ReplyDeletehi its Andrea here and I am form wesely primary school andthose look really yum form me to eat
ReplyDeleteyah Andrea it does look yummy to eat!
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DeleteHi Andrea pasa I kind of like how you said it looked really yum form me to eatyeah really like that
Deletehi my name is sofaia from Wesley primary school i really loved how you described the mystery object and the bliss ball
ReplyDeleteI wonder how you made it also i can imagine you eating it .
ReplyDeletelots of describing words and detail
they look yum i wish i could have some
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ReplyDeleteHi my name is Harper-Lee and I'm from Wesley great describing words and it looks so delicious
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ReplyDeleteWHAT ARE THE Ingredients?
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Anaiyah Latu I would like to say to to Sofia that I liked how you were calm with all your words thank you
ReplyDeletehi i'm sopheighra i like those names you gave the food how did it taste
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Sarah and I go to Wesley Primary School.I love how you described it.It looks so yum and delicious.I love how you put whaat you think.
ReplyDeleteHi There my name is Genesis I am from Wesley Primary School and I am a student in room 4. I really like your title called the mysterious balls and they look delicious that i wish i could eat it in my mouth.
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yeah what are the ingredients?
ReplyDeleteHi I am Sophie from Awahono School. I like how you described it as a disgusting object, but then you changed your mind. How many mysterious objects did you make?
ReplyDeletehello my name is jacob from yms school it looks yum
ReplyDeleteHi I'm Solly from Awahonno School. I like how much you are describing the mysterious ball. It looks delicious, but maybe next time you could say the order of the ingredients.
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Daphne and Phi-An and we read your post on your blog.We like what you done with the describing and what you tasted,looked,smelted and what you throat about the first.Maybe you should become a writer when you grow up,LOL,haha well good job jed
ReplyDeleteWhat are the ingredients cause it looks taste
ReplyDeleteHi guys i'm sopheighra again from welsey primary school i REALLY WANT TO EAT BLISS BALLS THEY LOOK DELICOUS
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ReplyDeletehi again its me Phi-An from wesley primary school those bliss balls look really delicious!!! well done!!
ReplyDeleteLook how amazing those yummy balls
ReplyDeletehi again its me Sarah from Wesley primary school those bliss balls look really delicious!!! well done!!
ReplyDeleteI really like those it looks delicous
ReplyDeletehi my name semisi i am a student in room 4 at Wesley primary school.i really your name and what you have made it makes me think like a brilliant kid have a nice day.
ReplyDeletehi my name is sofaia from Wesley primary school. just to say to you who ever made this it looks delicious and so yummy that people might want to eat it Looks so yummy GREAT JOB!
ReplyDeletehi it me loseli from wesley primary school that has good ingreedyent
ReplyDeletei want to tast some
hi,my name is faith and i am a student from Wesley primary school in rm 4 and i would like to know what object is mysterious-Faith
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Sopheighra i'm here again too say i think i followed the recipe and i think i got it,i think it does kinda taste delicous
ReplyDeleteHi there my name is Genesis from Wesley Primary School I am a student in rm 4 and I like how your tittle Mysterious Balls I wish i could taste it because it looks DELICIOUS!!!!
ReplyDeleteHi my name is faith and i am a student from rm 4 from Wesley primary school and i would like to know who made that object mysterious and what does it feel like-Faith
ReplyDeletethat looks to yummy to eat i wish i could make some of that i think i shod make some right now but i don´t have the ingredient to make it so can you come make it for me
ReplyDeleteHi my name is faith and i am a student from room 4 i come from Wesley primary school i would like to know could yous change the color of those balls i would like,e it better and looks so yum-FAITH
ReplyDeletehi my name is nevaeh, and i have read your story about the "mystery object".i would like to taste it.
ReplyDeleteHi my name is faith and i am a student from rm 4 i would like to smell taste and feel it it looks great.-Faith
ReplyDeletenice food i wish i could taste it
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ReplyDeleteWow! This is a masterpiece, I like how you describe the mysterious object. You also use words like poisonous, disgustable raisins bitter dark cocoa bland and tasteless.
To make this better you should make it more eye catching so other people can look at you great writing.
This reminds me of the writing test, we watched the first part of a video, then we had to base the story on the video. Mr Robertson commented on my blog how good my writing was.
One question. Where did you get your inspiration?
By: Mika
School: Yaldhurst Model School
Link to Blog: http://ymsmika.blogspot.co.nz/
Hi there my name is Ryan and I am from Awahono School. The bliss balls you guys made look really yummy. Next time you should write down the ingredients you need to make them and how to make them. How long did it take to make them? From Ryan at Awahono School.
ReplyDeletehi im cody from papakura central school those look really yummy
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ReplyDeleteKia Ora my name is Samicia I am from Kaikohe West School
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you explained about the item your did with your class or your friends. It sound really yummy to eat.
Hi my name is twinkles i love your cooking i can just feel that there melting in my mouth they look delicious
ReplyDeleteHi My name is Maika i like the delicious description you used. The raisin description you used for the poisons raisin. But I like raisins.
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Karl from pcs and I like how you added a lot of disruptive parts in the picie of writing if ou have time can you check out my blog https://pcskarls.blogspot.com/
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